Hvorfor er dette et dårligt digt? {{forumTopicSubject}}
Jeg er en skovl til digte, og nu skal jeg så i en opgave skrive 350 ord om hvorfor dette er et dårligt digt.
Så er der en der vil forbarme sig over mig og skære det ud i pap?
Beautiful Railway Bridge of the Silv’ry Tay!
Alas! I am very sorry to say
That ninety lives have been taken away
On the last Sabbath day of 1879,
Which will be remember’d for a very long time.
’Twas about seven o’clock at night,
And the wind it blew with all its might,
And the rain came pouring down,
And the dark clouds seem’d to frown,
And the Demon of the air seem’d to say-
“I’ll blow down the Bridge of Tay.”
When the train left Edinburgh
The passengers’ hearts were light and felt no sorrow,
But Boreas blew a terrific gale,
Which made their hearts for to quail,
And many of the passengers with fear did say-
“I hope God will send us safe across the Bridge of Tay.”
But when the train came near to Wormit Bay,
Boreas he did loud and angry bray,
And shook the central girders of the Bridge of Tay
On the last Sabbath day of 1879,
Which will be remember’d for a very long time.
So the train sped on with all its might,
And Bonnie Dundee soon hove in sight,
And the passengers’ hearts felt light,
Thinking they would enjoy themselves on the New Year,
With their friends at home they lov’d most dear,
And wish them all a happy New Year.
So the train mov’d slowly along the Bridge of Tay,
Until it was about midway,
Then the central girders with a crash gave way,
And down went the train and passengers into the Tay!
The Storm Fiend did loudly bray,
Because ninety lives had been taken away,
On the last Sabbath day of 1879,
Which will be remember’d for a very long time.
As soon as the catastrophe came to be known
The alarm from mouth to mouth was blown,
And the cry rang out all o’er the town,
Good Heavens! the Tay Bridge is blown down,
And a passenger train from Edinburgh,
Which fill’d all the peoples hearts with sorrow,
And made them for to turn pale,
Because none of the passengers were sav’d to tell the tale
How the disaster happen’d on the last Sabbath day of 1879,
Which will be remember’d for a very long time.
It must have been an awful sight,
To witness in the dusky moonlight,
While the Storm Fiend did laugh, and angry did bray,
Along the Railway Bridge of the Silv’ry Tay,
Oh! ill-fated Bridge of the Silv’ry Tay,
I must now conclude my lay
By telling the world fearlessly without the least dismay,
That your central girders would not have given way,
At least many sensible men do say,
Had they been supported on each side with buttresses,
At least many sensible men confesses,
For the stronger we our houses do build,
The less chance we have of being killed.
Dreadful Accident on the Tay Bridge
Loss of Passenger Train
Dundee, Sunday Midnight
mar 2008
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http://krabat.menneske.dk/_forfatter/skrivedigte_hvedekorns_redaktion.htm
maj 2007
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maj 2007
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maj 2008
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Men hvis man absolut skulle sige noget, kunne det godt lyde som om at det er skrevet af et barn, med for mange gentagelser ligesom en sang/børnerim samtidig bruges ordet ''og (and)'' også ret tit
jan 2012
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JEG synes det er et ringe digt fordi:
Først og fremmest er det jo en sørgelig hændelse, men det synes jeg ikke jeg fornemmer i rytmen. hvis man havde trukket sætningerne ud, eller gjort sætningerne meget korte ville det have haft en mere dramatisk effekt, i forhold til hvad der rent faktisk sker.
jeg synes også der mangler et budskab, (godt nok har jeg kun skimtet, og ikke givet det tid)..et godt digt er for mig et, hvor man ikke nødvendigvis aner hvad der står, men man får noget personligt ud af det. altså en individuel oplevelse..
Rytmen er også gal synes jeg.. synes ikke jeg kan få det til at "synge" i mit hovede, og derfor bliver det meget tungt at læse.
maj 2008
Følger: 3 Følgere: 2 Hunde: 1 Emner: 116 Svar: 1.404
maj 2007
Følger: 5 Følgere: 36 Hunde: 4 Emner: 416 Svar: 13.985
jan 2012
Følger: 7 Følgere: 6 Hunde: 4 Emner: 46 Svar: 819
men et eller andet må han jo kunne, siden de bliver læst til at starte med
maj 2007
Følger: 5 Følgere: 36 Hunde: 4 Emner: 416 Svar: 13.985
maj 2007
Følger: 5 Følgere: 36 Hunde: 4 Emner: 416 Svar: 13.985
Hvorfor er dette et dårligt digt?